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Post by noshit on May 14, 2004 23:59:26 GMT -5
Can he? so Pete, did you like my song? whatd ya think?
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Post by pete on May 15, 2004 0:38:16 GMT -5
i give it...
6 thumbs up!
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Post by noshit on May 15, 2004 0:44:51 GMT -5
danka...  |
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Post by 2Short on May 15, 2004 2:13:48 GMT -5
Pete's poetry is so good it makes me cry. Did his poems make anybody else cry?
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Post by Macha on May 15, 2004 2:14:25 GMT -5
 Eddie Vetter does that to me sometimes, too.
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Post by censored on May 15, 2004 7:51:09 GMT -5
you walked out in the rain. stood there and watched you go. falling tears washed you out, of my mind, of my soul. why dont you let me be? and leave my memory. shadows haunt my thoughts, what you left there is lost. why are you blind to see, what you've done to me? I'm down, i'm low. aint no strength left in these bones. I dont understand why you cried. I dont understand why you lied. You said you loved me, but it was so easy.... to walk away. Why did I comfort you, when you let me go? Why was i the one to wipe your tears? Why was i the one to be strong? Why? Im letting you go (im falling) im letting you go (im falling) letting you go (falling) okay.. so its not really a poem.. its a song i wrote.. and censored actually has music to back that up.. but yeah.. there ya go. As soon as the words led into "I dont understand why..." I immediately got confused. Two songs combined? I have two sets of music for the words in your song. Lol. I was singing it in my head and then the words changed and it went to the other music. (((only you know what im talking about))) |
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Post by Macha on May 16, 2004 18:35:02 GMT -5
Here's a bit of my own I did in poetry class last year.
Keep in mind I never wrote a lick of poety before this...be gentle.
The Yellow Star
Optimism soon revived
We even doubted that he wanted to do it
Great families
Great shops
So what? It’s just a cloth star on my arm
Night fell
The race towards death had begun
The ghetto
The synagogue was like a huge station – luggage and tears
Then night fell
Deportation
“Get on with you, lazy swine”<br>Stuffed like sardines into a train
Children cried for water
The stars were only sparks of fire which devoured us whole
Then - night fell
“Oh G-d, Lord of the universe, take pity upon us in Thy great mercy…”
Naked
Our flesh was creeping
He said, “MEN TO THE LEFT, WOMEN TO THE RIGHT!!”<br>Work
Sweat
Bread and Soup
The old and sick were dead by now
That means grandpa and Aunt Mottle
And then - night fell
That night the soup tasted of corpses
Numbers – branded into our skin
Sleep had fled from my eyes
…those children in the flames
Little Moesha, Tevi and Micah
None of this could be true
Gas showers
Crematoriums
Bullets
We were face to face with the angel of death
Then there was instant silence
Never shall I forget that smoke
Never shall I forget that smell
Never shall I forget those flames which consumed my faith forever
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Post by pete on May 16, 2004 18:39:57 GMT -5
this is intitled No For Luck
no for luck,
intake the vacuum suck,
dont get fucked,
dont eat duck.
The End.
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Post by 2Short on May 17, 2004 12:17:54 GMT -5
You do that all the time and I have to admit that it bothers me. Do it one more time and I rape Julie. |
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Post by Macha on May 17, 2004 14:37:13 GMT -5
Why does that bother you so? Is it a complex?
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Post by I CANT LOG IN on May 17, 2004 14:46:54 GMT -5
i think that people that believe in God are bothered by it.. it erks me a little.. but you can do what you please.. and what made you write that poem.. its very interesting?
censored.. yes i do know what youre talking about.. we have to change the first song to fit the new one.. cause that music for the first one is depressing.. good.. but doesnt work for me anymore.. why am i typing this.. i could be telling you.. LOL..
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Post by pete on May 17, 2004 14:48:42 GMT -5
poetry is liek an apple,
it sucks,
it makes sense,
this poem sucks,
probably cuz i stole it from you,
then messed it up.
i think you suck,
cuz youre cool.
wanna mild a cat?
wanna bite a worm?
wanna eat dirt?
its all for you asshole!
enjoy my poem,
buy a book,
take a look,
READING RAINBOW!
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Post by Macha on May 17, 2004 15:14:46 GMT -5
i think that people that believe in God are bothered by it.. it erks me a little.. but you can do what you please.. and what made you write that poem.. its very interesting? Ok, lets lay this on the line people. DEEEEEP BREATH I should not have to be defending myself in this issue, consider this more of education, not defense. I do believe in G-d. I believe in Him as if he were standing right next to me eating a bag of cheetos. I believe He is everywhere in everything and in everybody. I work with the subtle substance of Him in everyone I come in contact to. I was raised Jewish by a non-religious dad's side of the family. Growing up, my educated mind formed what I believe to be truth. My truth is not in organized religion even though some may stem from my initial background. I consider myself a non-practicing Jew on a more spiritualistic level. Thus not participating in the customs and traditions normal Jew's undergo. Simply, because I was not raised to follow custom, I did my own research on what seemed right. Two things that would be parallel to my thoughts on Judaism, 1. Jesus is not my Lord, Savior, Messiach whatever... And 2. Spelling G-d. To take a definition from my favorite Jewish reference website... G-D: A way of avoiding writing a name of G-d, to avoid the risk of the sin of erasing or defacing the Name. Period. It is a sign of respect people, not a means to 'freak you out', ‘bother’ you or 'irk' you. Thank you, I will be doing 2 shows 10pm Saturday/Sunday. PS. The poem was derived from a few excerpts from the novel Night by Elie Wiesel. |
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Post by I CANT LOG IN on May 17, 2004 15:19:22 GMT -5
"irk" i spelled that wrong! LOL.. but i was just trying to give you a reason for why he might have been "irked" you never should have to defend yourself... once again opinions.. but you did ask... so... cool. done.
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Post by sonshine76 on May 17, 2004 15:27:06 GMT -5
1. I knew why you were spelling it that way Macha. Let's drop it and not make it a whole issue in the poetry thread. I liked your poem. My stepmother just visited the Holocaust museum in DC. I want to go. I also liked your Shakespeare poem you chose because he's praising her unconventional beauty and loves her for it.
2. I was also going to post a Keats ode 2short, but I didn't want to post too many in one post. I like him also.
3. Warren, I want to see "Clocks." Not the one by Coldplay.
4. Pete, don't make an assery out of this thread you Pearljam plagiarist.
My bad, Pete. I did say you could post your favorite, and/or the banana fanna song. Don't eat duck it is.
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